
Image from pinterest.com
Black-iron wood stove flared pungently warm
Checkerboard straddling an oak barrel rim
Players hunched upon fruit crates that creaked
Pipesmoke circled the older man’s head
Clear blue eyes in a white whiskered face
The young man kept shifting uncomfortably
Considering moves with a hesitant hand when
The door blew bang-open to wind-driven snow
And a frightening figure appeared with a rush
Fully filling the portal with storm-bundled hulk
Wet snow gusted across the sawdust-laid floor
He had panic about him and gasped for lost breath
Till his mouth gave a cry like a bear in a trap
Filling up the big room with deep guttural moans
It took a few moments to unroll his trouble
His boys had both fallen through hard millpond ice
In a single swift motion the aproned proprietor
Grabbed for his coat and vaulted the bartop
The players jumped up checkers flew through the air
They snatched coiled ropes and an oil-lamp down
From wall pegs along the shelved mercantile wall
The old man knocked the father back into the night
The young man flew by them on tall slender legs
Pumping his way through the knee-high new snow
He couldn’t make out where the breach had occurred
But heard desperate voices and thanked God for that
With a rope in his hand he moved out on the ice
Calling and crawling toward where they might be
The lantern light jounced as the rest of the party
Slogged through the dense drifts to the edge of the pond
Two immature ghosts were chased off on that night
But a bone-chill still shivers them sixty years on
Gray haired brothers now play that same barrelhead board
Keeping close by the heat of that same old black stove
Ready willing and able to jump at the sound of the door
(originally posted December 2013)
Wow. Is this based in fact? It’s super. Hey, thanks for your comment on my Nelson Mandela poem. My mistake embarrasses me and I appreciate your pointing it out, and hope the replacement line is at least a little better. : )
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it’s a fiction I imagine could easily have happened in my adopted New England neighborhood – I’m glad I could help – I’ve made plenty of mistakes and understand the feeling
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WOWZA, Paul–you’re too good!
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reflects my newfound New England sensibilities
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Yes we can indeed thank God Paul, for second chances and for the gift you have with words , I was experiencing the terror they felt at the thought of loosing the boys, your words bring imagery and this brings emotions…. well done.
Christmas Love from both of us – Anne
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thank you dearly for your thoughtful comments
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Great control and vivid details!
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glad that you liked it
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Talk about pace and suspense! Well done many times over.
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so glad you liked the story – it was fun to write
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Reblogged this on Totally Inspired Mind….
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thank you for sharing my poem with your readers, paulette
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You are welcome Paul and thanks for writing it. I liked your style and approach. It was fresh and innovative.
Where did the photo come from?
Did the photo inspire you to write the story?
I am becoming quite the photo journalist/photo blogger.
Quite often I find that just being in a special area, seeing new places inspire the story or haiku or poem or song etc…or recipe.
Some of the web sites I created and am a writer and editor-in-chief you might like are:
CookingUpaStorminCA.ning.com
CookingUpaStormWithMissPolly.wordpress.com
PhotosThatInspireWords.wordpress.com
Created so photographers can share their photos as a springboard so writers can write stories or other create works. You WOULD LOVE THAT ONE.
It is nice to meet you here Paul and look forward to sharing more creative works together. Aside from writing are you a photographer too?
What are your web sites & blogs?
Paulette Le Pore Motzko
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no – I am not a photographer – I write my poems and then have fun searching the net for a suitable complementary image – I give all the images I use appropriate attribution right below the image – this is my only blog
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Are you Italian?
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yes – my parents were born in Italy – see my “About the Author” page
http://poesypluspolemics.com/about/
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See I thought you were Italian. Do you like to cook and if you do, what is your forte?
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by the way – I had a boyhood pal in 1950s Newark NJ named Joe LePore – he suffered with a polio limp
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I wonder if me and Joe are related?
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Reblogged this on Poesy plus Polemics.
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You’re a real ol`time story`teller . . .
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well, you got the “ol’ time” part right
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Ever the consummate storyteller – superb poem.
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happy that you enjoyed it
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Reblogged this on OUR POETRY CORNER.
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thank you for sharing my poem with your readers
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What a gem, Paul! As a novelist, I strive to write scenes packed with emotive action. I envy poets like you who achieve this with just a few words. Good poets rock.
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your comment sings to my heart, Rosaliene
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I love this. You generated a sense of urgency with your lines. Great story.
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I’m pleased you enjoyed it
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Brilliantly descriptive, and with great pace. A fantastic read, Paul.
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thanks sincerely, chris
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I almost wanted this to be real. I believed it to be. It felt like it. Every piece of description and action unfolded as if you had been there taking part in the adventure. I agree with Rosaliene. Capturing the excitement and tension in so few words is a gift.
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your comment means more than you know, Anne Marie – I have been toying with the idea of trying some prose fiction – your words are encouraging
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I love this too, for the above reasons! I was on the edge of my seat, but it so moved me as well, the unsung love and heroics of every day people. ❤
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I like your perspective
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Thank you.
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This is a beautiful poem and wonderful story. Inspirational. I will look at pictures in a different light and think about the hidden back-story.
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I’m glad you enjoyed it
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This is wonderful Paul! You had hooked me at the first couple of lines! Curious, did the picture prompt the poem or did you find it afterward?
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the poem was written several years ago – I found the image yesterday
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This is one of my faves of yours, Paul–epic tale, classic nostalgia, timeless.
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happy to know that, muzzy
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Hahaha–thanks for making me laugh, Paul, I can go to sleep smiling this morning 🙂
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You’ve painted the scene so well that I can feel both the stove’s heat, and the winter-chilled gust when the door opens.
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that tells me it succeeded more than I realized
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Very much so.
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Gripping story. I love the continuity of the immature ghosts playing checkers at the end. The picture reminds me of a Norman Rockwell.
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definitely rockwellian
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