counting backwards into the ether
rush of moments remembered
illogical sequence of images
flash like the frames of a movie reel
speeding through sprockets
a ratcheting ratcheting diminuendo
pulls consciousness deep
down and down to the void
the black bottom of nothing
where pain can no longer be felt
but is nonetheless
horridly dreamt and imagined
aware of the cutting
through gristle and bone
vicious violent strokes
precise surgical actions
in synch with unhearable
rhythmical beats of insidious
heart and lung pumping machines
life no longer completely contained
to this flesh and blood entity
shared now instead with
strange grim apparatus
inanimate engines and objects
of rubber and plastic and steel
where the unsleeping soul
finds uncomfortable annex
and desperate prayer
races to and fro coursing through
stiff inarticulate hoses and tubes
back and forth between
mindful and mindless receptacles
frantic in search of a terrified voice
If it be you I hope you are well, Paul…cheers.
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many thanks, dave – it’s been years since my experiences
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Wonderful!
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thanks kindly
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Wow…The imagery this poem brings… I am completely speechless! Well done, sir, very well done.
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I appreciate that most sincerely
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I can remember as a boy having surgery under ‘ether’, a far cry from modern anesthesia. You capture the conscious unconsciousness so viscerally! Hearing the voices of surgeon and nurses but not understanding what they were saying in technical terms, yet the angst in their tone . . . Bravo! Well done . . .
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I use “ether” here under poetic license – thank you for your generous comments
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Vivid and frightening! I’m glad you’re alright Paul! Well done!
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many thanks, penny – major surgery is a frightening experience, indeed
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You captured this experience eloquently, Paul.
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thanks kindly, luanne
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I must completely agree with LuAnne. You captured the surgical experience to a tee with eloquent words and the empathetic thought behind it. I also think it can represent an emotional surgery type of fear, when one feels a traumatic sense of loss. Great, great poem/prose.Absolutely profound and amazing. K D
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you are most kind, k.d. – I will treasure this comment in my keepsake box
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Paul, that is the sweetest thing to say! How kind you are, my friend! k. d. 🙂
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Brings back a memory from 40 years ago…you describe it so well – the emotional aspect of being at the mercy of doctors and machines and heaven knows what!
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it fairly reflects my experiences with open heart surgeries
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I’m so sorry you had to go through such serious surgeries! And more than once! (Mine was just one major surgery that didn’t involve the heart, thankfully.) Hope you’re feeling as well as possible these days.
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It is as if you’ve been reading my mail, Paul!
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*smile*
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Frightening and brilliant. I’m glad to read from other comments that heart surgery is behind you, Paul.
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indelible memories
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I hope all the pain is behind you. Excellent job of putting closure on your memory.
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much appreciated
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